Me and my friends, Cole and Rojan, wandering through the graveyard it felt like something was watching us. I didn't really take notice of it though. We find a spot in the middle of this cemetery, we all sat down, and we prepared ourselves for what we were going to play.
It was about 2:30am and darkness surrounded the cemetery. We all knew that there was a little forestry behind the cemetery but it was out of vision because none of the lights around the cemetery worked. We got the game out of my bag and just seeing the name of the bored sent chills down my spine because i had seen many videos about this game and they all seemed too work and some of them went very bad. We started the ritual as we were meant to. We circled the playing check around the bored, Asked if anyone was there, and waited.
To be continued....
Good use of descriptive language, Aiden! I like how you showed (rather than told) us that the character was scared when you said the chills ran down your spine.
ReplyDeleteYour next steps are to do more of that showing with some of your other sentences, too! Also have another read through your first sentence and see if it makes sense - it may need some extra punctuation!